standing before the pews
with both hands
on the altar
he raises his hands
in the air
and begins to work
the religious flippers
bringing tears of joy
and witnesses galore
as his words pinball
through the well dressed
congregation of brothers and sisters
the amens and hallelujahs
are punctuated
with chords of music
from the choir
like the bells and whistles
of a game machine
and the parishioners light up
as they hear what god
has in store for them
but the pastor hits tilt
when he mentions
one of
their
sins
hahaha – too funny, having a pinball game as a metaphor for the pastor working the crowd – love it!
I’ve seen quite a bit of this lately…really enjoyed this poem.
You’re a clever man, Charlie.
An interesting metaphor.
brilliant. the richer people get by worldly means the shier they become of mirror to soul.
Damn! Maybe not a good word to use, but what else can one say about the power behind this piece!?
So true .. We always forget our sins before expecting best from God !
Isn’t that the case for all of us…no one wants to hear that they’re not perfect. sigh…
Oh, that pinball wizard – I’ve known a few of those in my life… Funny, they can spot a sin a mile away in someone else, but when it comes to their own, can’t see past their nose. Guess that’s different…
strong–i like this one…
blessings
jane
the visual images in this one are fabulous!
wonderful metaphoric value in this poem and such a great grasp on how quickly the mood can change when one has to face an ugly truth….
Love it – amazing…just amazing.
Amazing concept. Very well written. You sum up the problems with organized religion very well when making this analogy.
oh wow!!! that zinger stinged… i stratched my head for a good minute… clever work my friend… clever work..
Hahaha, omigosh this is so true! Great metaphor.
Charles, you have me hooting with laughter! Well done!
I agree with the other comments. Very nicely done!
A really powerful and imaginative metaphor – I’m going to have The Who going round in my head all day now!
Brilliant work as always 🙂
hmm, great analogy. I’ve actually thought some pretty similar things beofre. I’m impressed by your poetry (: i admire your style and like the feel of your poems. definitely gonna subscribe (:
Love it… Love the song by The Who too… this reminds me of the whole “Tommy” movie…
“His disciples lead him in and he just does the rest, he’s got crazy flipper fingers, never seen him fail, that deaf, dumb and blind kid… sure plays a mean pinball!”
=)