“may we pray for you”

 by River Urke and charles wm. martin

 

a life
a mere
drop in the bucket
of time
but to me
she was life
my life
swallowed whole
by the industry
she bled for
now she floats
barren in the universe
a token
of corporate greed
“may we pray for you” 

a life
a mere moment in time
he joined for life
the gang to live
now she
was the price
of membership
a one-way ticket
but could he?
he has to
or he dies
his mama dies
Why?
“may we pray for you”

 

River Urke and I have entered into a duel poetry challenge and this is the resulting poem.  Duel Poetry:  a prearranged poetry writing challenge  between two people to evolve a new poem where each writer must respond to the other writer’s lines  (4 -5 ) until both parties agree that the poem is complete

18 thoughts on ““may we pray for you”

  1. Nice work. You say that you are allowed to write 4-5 lines before the other responds? I have done this where each person gets one line before the other responds and it is difficult, sometimes great, sometimes awful!

  2. How well you have both done this one!! Really, so smooth.. I didn’t even feel like 2 people have written it!! TOO GOOD!!

    “now she floats
    barren in the universe” — such a poignant and intense set of lines.. WOW!!

    Life on the streets, stranded between gangs… lost forever..
    GOSH!! How tough it must be!

    Well written, C and R… Kudos to both of you!!

  3. Hi Charles, just popping in to say that I will read all your latest poems over the weekend, when I can do them justice with the leisurely read they deserve. xxx

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