she had
so carefully
woven her crown
of thorns
from her beliefs
binding each row
with the twisted twine
of her sense
of worthlessness
wearing it
with olympian pride
year after year
turning water
into wine
that others would drink
while she hung thirsty
upon a cross
carved with her own hands
hands she marked
so her tormentors
would know where
to place the nails
and yet
she knew not
what she
had
done
Or a victim of selflessness?
thats what i want to believe
brilliant as always, capturing that part of inner senseless martyrdom so well. Thanks for your wonderful words that touch. In case i don’t venture back here before 2011 may you enter it gently surrounded by love and may it be a year that lifts you up, look forward to seeing abook of your poetry. As i Look forward to more of your words. Thank you also for your generous comments this year on my site and for your support. It has meant a lot to me, i hope you are well, and well looked after, viv x
Exactly! You “hit the nail on the head”!
Excellent poem – met a few people like that in my time. I love the ‘carved with her own hands’ line.
Really interesting twist at the end, Charles! Great post.
The Dagger effect is well founded here, Charles!!!
Is such self”less”ness the ultimate self-centeredness? Wonderful illustration of the futility of martyrdom. Well done, Charles. This one truly is powerful.
hey…
I think, I know her. ?!
😉
great read. you capture beautifully something not so pretty with this…
This is incredible, well, incredibly insightful, and thought-provoking – I think to some extent or at one time or another we all are or have been victims of ourselves, and some have certainly played the role to perfection. I agree with Jamie’s observation (question) that selflessness may be the ultimate self-centeredness. Very powerful poem indeed.
this either makes me want to reconsider the cross ive carved for myself, or be proud & happy by, making more of a scene…
great writting!
It’s interesting what guilt can do…
This is absolutely remarkable.. Very well written and brings the point home well.
fabulous as always charles, simply splendid. i too seem to tilt towards the opinion of papo and theonlycin. it sounds more like selflessness
You never cease to amaze me with your insight and your ability to just — capture a feeling, a state of mind and express it so perfectly
nicely done portrait of what is so narcissistic, and better for not having stated it – thanks
Hmm selflessness.. Very thought provoking,excellent poem.
wow… just… wow…
What insights you have, Charles. It’s one thing to see it, but to be able to write so succinctly about it…
Hi Charles .. woven her crown of thorns from her beliefs .. don’t we do that too often .. very thought provoking .. for she knows not what she had done …
Moving poem .. a victim of self … thanks – Hilary
Not sure what to say, your portrait is so complete. wow.
Wow – this one is amazing. Thanks for sharing such great and thought-provoking words xx