fateful night…

by   Toni L. A. Cross
       Charles W. Martin

so smooth, so white
so still and pale
a survivor’s will
yet hauntingly frail
 
recalling now
that fateful night
doors forced open
brought a dreadful sight
 
cool dark breeze
swept right in
accompanied by
that desert djinn
 
no words were spoken
just a devilish grin
was on the face
of this evil djinn
 
innocent eyes caught
in his decaying gaze
hell was fully wrought
in that dreadful blaze
 
from man to beast
so went this ghoulish flame
twas my soul he sought
in his deadly game
 
I saw my path
just one way out
I risked his wrath
fought through my doubt
 
fell to my knees
and began to pray
an angel lord
please send my way
 
only in my dreams
could it be
I am saved by a child
a guileless babe of three

 

Toni L. A. Cross and I have entered into a duel poetry challenge and this is the resulting poem.  Duel Poetry:  a prearranged poetry writing challenge  between two people to evolve a new poem where each writer must respond to the other writer’s lines  (4 -5 ) until both parties agree that the poem is complete.

18 thoughts on “fateful night…

  1. wolves get no slace in a holy land.solace or no solace they roam aroud in the guise of suicide bombers your poem made me think on these lines.wearing the skins of innocent lambs.destiny,nothing ,else.your poem made think on these lines good poem

  2. Pingback: fateful night… a duel poem with Charles Martin and Toni L.A. Cross « The Wisdom of Gavroche

  3. Like yr collaboration– I did one with a great poet on a villanelle with a twist; here’s the link if you want to see the challenge we set ourselves and the result:

    http://lukepraterswordsalad.wordpress.com/2010/07/14/storming-villain-hell/

    Like yr poem above. I may pluck up the courage to upload myself reciting sometime… or even switch on my iSight camera (ouch). Glad to note in your R-hand column that you are conversant with iambic pentameter. So fe seem to be these days…. not that it makes them worse free-verse poets, but I think sonnets, villanelles, rondeaus etc should be attempted at least once by all poets, if only for the experience. It does strengthen the sense of rhythm in verse to know metrical form; there is musicality/rhythm/cadence in all poetry.

    Enjoyed visiting your blog, hope to be back soon

    Warmest Salad

    Luke

  4. this was awesome read 🙂 loved the closing paras !! And reminded me the time i used to duel with my ex-boyfriend ! it was a fun exercise 😀

  5. This is amazing, I have never heard of a duel before, but the first taste of it, brilliant, chilling and dark..! It doesn’t look like it is a collaboration, that is how perfect it is. Your site seems special and don’t let that iambic pentameter in your heart miss a beat.. It is just melodious the way it is!
    Cheers!
    Rachana.

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