and are ready
current operating system
too many errors
are being encountered
virus infections most probable
distorted sense of righteousness
are possible causes
on key functions
routine existence is operational
procedural stacks are overflowing
auto fill-in forms and e-love
have become the norm
system has crashed
hitting the return key
going back to the same
replaying man’s fate
again and again
no way out of the loop
please subscribe now
to a future
impending system failure …
Brilliant, fabulously clever!
I’m all for that recommended subscription. It all sounds so familiar.
just awesome. they so resemble, dont they?
This is amazing and so creative. I love it!
Really interesting relation, if only updates were that easy to come by. I am going to remember it every time I hit the back key on my keyboard.
my own “operating system” hasn’t been critically updated for 25 years now, so i’m seeing them blue screens pretty regularly now, hard rebooting does a body good though *grin*
Time for a new computer or a new life … which will it be?
OO the blue screen of death! I have not seen that in a long time, but it’s always an awful feeling when I do.
Very clever poem to describe it!
okay, so you’ve proven to me
that we think alike
this was a wonderful ride, my man!
everything in place
in it’s proper
on the page…
Hey, we could have a go with this, maybe not with this superb writing/image…
if you’d like, we can have a ‘word play-writing fest’ and any of your groupies could join in to have a little mind exercise THANG going?
We would each have time to ponder/write, because there is a time-zone difference, and my good morning is moving toward Tea Time, or Pub O’Clock somewhere in the mother land! (I say this tongue and cheek, kiddingly, and all too perky! 😉 for this time of day! oooH, just thought of a Great Soundtrack to have playing while reading this… Major Tom, Bowie… I know one is a rocketship-outer-technology, and one’s billGatesWare-inner-technogoop! or A Space Odyssey !? –
sorry for the WRANT=WRITE… you can Delete this post, if you wish, >blush, Denise<
I loved…processing slowed on key functions… Thisnis sadly true. Well done, my friend, as always. heartspell
We are dependent on technology. This piece really shows some of the problems we have created to ourselves.
a poem after my own heart.
hah! You’ve perfectly described the world as is it is today, surviving on virtual reality… (sigh)
Although the gap between reality and the virtual world is HUGE, the line dividing it seems to be getting thinner and finer.. but thta too is an illusion…
And in all of this, hate, greed and other vices still prevail..
Well put, C!!
God I do hate the internet and my cell phone. 😉
As always, AWESOME!! subscribe to a future where dreams may run without devices..YES!!!!
I love this. It’s perfect timing for me as I go back to work teaching this week! I might need to get an update!
cons of technology…brilliant poem:)
btw this award is for u:)
wonderful! I always have that while making my games when it start crashing like nobody’s business XD Thank for sharing this wonderful poem, I love it!=3
this is brilliant!!!!very nice, and how creative….i love the idea of humanity communicated through the bsod (blue screen of death)….still loving it….take care
I like this poem 🙂
Very provocative, I love it!
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Thank you in advance!
You are tooooo cool 8) 😎
Oh yeah… badass poem. The blue screen of death. Though I work from a Mac now… I’m not sure we have blue screens of death. 🙂
Excellent metaphor. This is a poem I wish I’d written.