we
like all boys do
made from mud and bricks
a dam
to hold back the flood of tears
which fell as rain
from the eyes of angels
so that we might sail our ships
across this ordained
yet demonic sea
ships made from
now forgotten dreams
and small pieces of wood
with sails
of gum wrappers
and string
and when our ships were ready
we began our journey
to lands uncharted
within our minds
31 thoughts on “illusion and/or ship of my childhood…”
I really like this. “ships made from now forgotten dreams”
is a beautiful line. and “made from gum wrappers and string” is a great image. I enoyed this poem very much.
AH, the audio tease! I’m at work and cannot listen… but when I get home… you and me, we have a date! The poem flows like a child’s toy boat in overflowing gutters after a spring rain.
Bryan…several people have been unbale to load the audio file…not sure what’s going on…since you said you would help…HELP! I don’t know why is won’t play on some systems but play on mine and other systems…I know very vague question…but that is the level of my knowledge on this…any suggestions?
Okay…panic made me write unbale instead of unable…but you know what I mean. 🙂
You’ll probably get bored with me telling you how much I like your poems but have to say I love the flow and imagary in this one. I haven’t had the chance to go through all your old poems yet but it really seems like you’re developing a signature, powerful style in your recent poems! (Not that I am an expert on poetry – just my personal observations.)
I thinkk my poetry is like my photography…every now and then I get a good shot. I continue to enjoy your poetry and hope many others will explore and be as awed as I am…many things to you and your gift! Have you read Bryan Borland’s poetry?…if not take a look…I think you’ll like him. http://poeticgrin.wordpress.com/
Ah, the resonance of this piece with inner child is like a gong crahsed inside a cave.
Your imagery is fantastic. The flow of the poem manages to be both choppy and smooth, just as the sea the boat in your poem might ride (and, of course, like that great metaphorical ocean we are all riding so precariously on!)
I look forward to reading more of your work.
In the words of a dead culture: I dig, man. I dig.
Just replace my http code with the link to your file, and then it should work.
I’ve found it’s much easier, though, to upload a video. Can you make a basic video with some graphics, a photo, or just the title of the poem, and load the audio over the video? I don’t know the technical terms here… I just play around until it works! Wish I were there to really help! I remember when I posted my audio it took HOURS. My latest vid – that just took about three seconds to post.
I just checked the link and it is as you described…could you hear the audio?…Maybe this is just another one of those ship of fools….I really don’t think anyone could tolerate a video of me…but I could add some photos to decrease the pain for the viewers. Thanks for your help…I’ll try another audio tonight.if you get a chance let me know if you can hear it….I feel like that tv commerical…”can you hear me now?”…:-)
We all learn from one another…each poet brings a gift to to the party and each gift brings a smile to those who recieve it or those who are willing to recieve it…your gift is as worthy as any brought to the party. I love what you write!
Would you like to add a checkbox, selecting which your readers can get your new posts via email?
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Thanks I don’t know too much about how to format and set options with the blog…but hopefully…I did what you suggested…if it’s not right please let me know…I am so appreciative of your help…I’m still learning how to do things…again many thanks for your help.
Yes. It works. I see the options to see posts by email.
You may also want to try disabling mShots preview, an annoying pop-up for a reader.
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I really like this. “ships made from now forgotten dreams”
is a beautiful line. and “made from gum wrappers and string” is a great image. I enoyed this poem very much.
this was a favourite past time for me.
love it.
I am now officially hooked on your audio 🙂 .
love this. resonates with me.
Good morning Charlie,
I wanted to tell you that the audio is not working in this one.
Probably you didn’t want to add your voice?
I just wanted to tell you that.
Great Poem:)
Mirella
awesome.
lovely lovely poem…especially the “a dam
to hold back the flood of tears” lines 🙂
This is a wonderful poem. The imagery is great, and I love the way it’s woven together. Kudos!
oh my… thats a splendid poem there..
and here’s a thank you award for you.. for being such a sweet regular commentor 🙂
http://megzone.wordpress.com/2010/03/09/poetic-resonance/
Love the brilliant images I get from your words! 🙂
hi, I’v got an award for you you deserve it so much , collect it in my blog.
AH, the audio tease! I’m at work and cannot listen… but when I get home… you and me, we have a date! The poem flows like a child’s toy boat in overflowing gutters after a spring rain.
“with sails
of gum wrappers
and string”
Lovely!
Bryan…several people have been unbale to load the audio file…not sure what’s going on…since you said you would help…HELP! I don’t know why is won’t play on some systems but play on mine and other systems…I know very vague question…but that is the level of my knowledge on this…any suggestions?
Okay…panic made me write unbale instead of unable…but you know what I mean. 🙂
You’ll probably get bored with me telling you how much I like your poems but have to say I love the flow and imagary in this one. I haven’t had the chance to go through all your old poems yet but it really seems like you’re developing a signature, powerful style in your recent poems! (Not that I am an expert on poetry – just my personal observations.)
I thinkk my poetry is like my photography…every now and then I get a good shot. I continue to enjoy your poetry and hope many others will explore and be as awed as I am…many things to you and your gift! Have you read Bryan Borland’s poetry?…if not take a look…I think you’ll like him. http://poeticgrin.wordpress.com/
Thanks for the matchmaking. 🙂
Ah, the resonance of this piece with inner child is like a gong crahsed inside a cave.
Your imagery is fantastic. The flow of the poem manages to be both choppy and smooth, just as the sea the boat in your poem might ride (and, of course, like that great metaphorical ocean we are all riding so precariously on!)
I look forward to reading more of your work.
In the words of a dead culture: I dig, man. I dig.
It looks like you’re doing the right thing – but the link isn’t to the correct file (at least now).
I went back to a post where I linked to audio, and here’s how I did it:
1. Upload mp3 to WordPress (buying the upgrade that allows posting of audio files)
2. Link to it to create the audio icon. I linked to mine using the following HTML
[audio http://poeticgrin.files.wordpress.com/2009/05/shake.mp3%5D
Just replace my http code with the link to your file, and then it should work.
I’ve found it’s much easier, though, to upload a video. Can you make a basic video with some graphics, a photo, or just the title of the poem, and load the audio over the video? I don’t know the technical terms here… I just play around until it works! Wish I were there to really help! I remember when I posted my audio it took HOURS. My latest vid – that just took about three seconds to post.
I just checked the link and it is as you described…could you hear the audio?…Maybe this is just another one of those ship of fools….I really don’t think anyone could tolerate a video of me…but I could add some photos to decrease the pain for the viewers. Thanks for your help…I’ll try another audio tonight.if you get a chance let me know if you can hear it….I feel like that tv commerical…”can you hear me now?”…:-)
“with sails / of gum wrappers / and string” – what imagery! thank you, and thank you for your regular visits!
loved this one:)
This was wonderful. You bring pleasure to us readers.
Your words of appreciation mean a lot to a beginner like me when I attempt at poetry.
I now know that you are giving your experienced opinion.
Thanks Martin!
We all learn from one another…each poet brings a gift to to the party and each gift brings a smile to those who recieve it or those who are willing to recieve it…your gift is as worthy as any brought to the party. I love what you write!
Hey!
Would you like to add a checkbox, selecting which your readers can get your new posts via email?
Here’s how
Ignore this comment if you already know this.
Thanks I don’t know too much about how to format and set options with the blog…but hopefully…I did what you suggested…if it’s not right please let me know…I am so appreciative of your help…I’m still learning how to do things…again many thanks for your help.
Yes. It works. I see the options to see posts by email.
You may also want to try disabling mShots preview, an annoying pop-up for a reader.
Here’s how
http://www.dropbox.com/gallery/980874/2/misc/wordpress?h=00842d
Thank you so much for your help with this…one day I may learn enough to be dangerous. 🙂
such a wonderful portrayal of childhood games and reality mixed.
like all boys made of mud and bricks
love the double entendre
BRAVO!!! what a poem! love this one, Martin. Wow!
this is really good. I love your metaphores and your religious adjectives.